· Place transitions at the beginning of the new paragraph, not at the end of the preceding one.

· Underline names of films; use quotation marks around names of short stories

Suggest better alternatives to the following:

Leading back to the parents nowadays think they don’t have to be

Just maybe we might

The reason why I think this is so is because

More kids are having trouble at home than there used to be

All of a sudden

Sexual activity of teenagers

A child should be brought up by . . .

Going to the other end of the spectrum

With society today having an increase on teen pregnancy

Furthermore, I also think that another reason

Suggest better alternatives to the following:

Leading back to the parents nowadays think they don’t have to be

Parents today believe . . .

Just maybe we might

Perhaps we might

The reason why I think this is so is because

This is because

More kids are having trouble at home than there used to be

More kids are having trouble at home than before

All of a sudden

Suddenly

Sexual activity of teenagers

Teenage sexual activity

A child should be brought up by . . .

A child should be raised by . . .

Going to the other end of the spectrum

On the other hand

In contrast

With society today having an increase on teen pregnancy

Teen pregnancy rates are increasing

Furthermore, I also think that another reason

Another reason is